Rainbow Snippets (9th January 2016)

Another week, another six sentences for the wonderful Rainbow Snippets group on Facebook. This week, a different book. Here are the first, er, seven sentences of my upcoming supernatural romance, A Frost of Cares, a winter ghost story. Luke isn’t having the best day…

In a way this story begins with me standing by the window of my London flat on Boxing Day with a cricket bat in my hands, seriously considering smashing every bloody fucking pane of glass in the bloody fucking flat into bloody fucking shards. The thing that stopped me, in the end, was the handle of the bloody bat, wrapped in a fraying green grip. The end of the grip was peeling up, and that tiny imperfection, that little spike of lighter green, by being out of place, threatened to tear open the whole grip. Staring at it, I realized that I didn’t know whether the bat was mine or Danny’s.

Well, fuck, I thought. You’ll have to excuse the paucity of my vocabulary at this point in the story. Obviously I was drunk as the proverbial skunk, and several of its cousins as well, and I never was much good at talking about my (bloody fucking) feelings.

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18 Responses to Rainbow Snippets (9th January 2016)

  1. Layla Dorine says:

    This was fun, i would love to know why he’s so mad, love the vocabulary 🙂

  2. P.T. Wyant says:

    Fun opening! Really want to know what’s going on,

  3. louiselyons013 says:

    Great start – I want to know why he’s so angry/upset.

  4. Elin Gregory says:

    *dies* drunk as a skunk’s cousin! I love that. Am I right in thinking that he’s as much scared as angry?

    • amyraenbow says:

      He’s feeling guilty and grieving. I don’t usually write first person so I had a lot of fun with this, just sitting back and letting Luke get everything off his chest 😄

  5. Nephy says:

    Loved it! I know that skunk well – and most of its cousins 🙂 I loved the style and the flow and how it all pivoted on one tiny detail – the fraying bat handle. Great work

  6. chrisquintonwriter says:

    Great internal dialogue!

  7. He sounds just a tad angry! Loved this snippet. Can’t wait to see more. 🙂

  8. I love ghost stories, and this one is starting off great!

  9. clarelondon says:

    A wonderfully sharp and evocative start 🙂

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